Teacher Feedback

Feedback

After giving in our first draft to our teachers to watch this is the feedback they gave back to us they were happy with the large majority of what we had done but they said we would need to make a lot of improvements to make our video better this is the feedback that they gave to us:

Bad Points

- The bed scene it is clear that two men are lying in bed together, I don't think this is not the effect you intended to create
- Concept not realised looks like two people playing similar roles it is not clear that the two actors are meant to be the same person. Possibly change the hoodie clip so he seems to morph into other actor
- Mise en Scene needs improving in the poker shot there is clearly a china cabinet in the background try to set up a more Hip-Hop styled theme for your music video
- Parts are missing you will need to make sure that these are included for your final video as it could be missing some key clips
- Some continuity errors for example when walking past the camera at the start of the video he walks one way and then the wrong way in the next shot
- No smoking if your video was to go on MTV it wouldn't be allowed due to the smoking clips

Good Points
- The clothes changing shot is very good and the changes are almost flawless the arm seems to stay in the same place throughout
- Good lip syncing it looks very clear and fits in time very well with the music
- The poker scene is also very good there is lots of room here to develop your music video try to make this scene longer as it could be a very good one
- Good general editing and filming the quality of both is quite good throughout the video